I'll write a real "pitch"/"outline" for you guys one of these days. The right words are floating around out there somewhere but I haven't caught them yet.
But I re-started writing it again. 'Tere is fourteen, Keziren is his half-sister, and it's written in first person, past tense. And actually, if all goes to plan I'll be writing the whole series with each chapter alternating Keziren and Dantere's points of views o_O
It scared me to write with a "main" female character. That's actually a funny quirk about me: generally speaking, I dislike reading books with a female main character. Especially if there is no male MC. Same with my writing.
But whatever. I'll learn. :]
Anyway. For now, here's a little excerpt that I scribbled out sometime in the wee hours of this morning ;)
read: completely unedited ;)
It's not my fault my eyes are unusual. I actually don't know whose fault it is, but it doesn't matter now. I've snuck into Lady Tela's chambers and borrowed her mirrors. I've looked into these eyes myself. I see why people avoid my gaze. It's not their color- they're only grey. One might call them silver. But it's the way they... shimmer. No, that's not the right word. They do something strange. It's as if you put a dragon's eyes into a dog's face: they look like they belong to another creature.
Not to flatter myself, but they glow; as if someone took a star right out of the heavens and poured the light into my irises. Not to jest, but they're otherworldly.
I hate them.